Attempting to write a story, need to know if is any good so far... (VERY LONG)? pt. 3?

i opened my eyes to see a enormous, black gate with black clouds and grey wall and grey floors. i thought heaven was going to be a little bit brighter. thats when i realized that my actions resulted in my own demise. i was going to hell. little did i know that what "god" had planned for me was worse than hell. i was going to be banished back to earth. not for any sould purpose, but because "god" had a plan for me that i was not aware of. i walked closer and closer to those gates, and saw a man with a greyish colored robe, and a beard. i thought it was god. i walked closer, and spoke a few words. "where am i" i said. he simply told me that i was at the proving grounds. i then asked what exactly he was talking about. he stated that i was in the proving grounds. i needed to prove to god that i deserved to go to heaven. i had no way to prove it. i had nothing to say. thats when i heard a voice. no body to match it, but just a voice from everywhere that said "you, my child are not allowed to enter the great eternal resting place. you have commited a great sin, and will be banished to earth to prove to me that you deserve to be here". i looked around and then everything went black. i closed my eyes tight, and opened them. i was back at the funeral just in time to see my body being buried.